For some reason I cannot see the first one. The second has some good touches but there is a moment in the scene direction which says "who have been seeing each other for four months". Can you see what the problem is with that? Ask me if you can't work it out. The third one (Myles and Lucy) is well drawn - I particularly like how Myles has very little self-confidence. Some spelling and grammar errors though. Did you work on it with your helper? IN the last one it's a great touch to have the little girl talk to Mr Sheepy at one point. Promising work Fay!
For some reason I cannot see the first one. The second has some good touches but there is a moment in the scene direction which says "who have been seeing each other for four months". Can you see what the problem is with that? Ask me if you can't work it out. The third one (Myles and Lucy) is well drawn - I particularly like how Myles has very little self-confidence. Some spelling and grammar errors though. Did you work on it with your helper? IN the last one it's a great touch to have the little girl talk to Mr Sheepy at one point. Promising work Fay!
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